Hansel and Gretel
Hansel and Gretel
In the beginning there was a little village. A poor man lived there with his two children. One was named Hansel and the other was Gretel.
One day they both had to go into the woods to find some flowers for the table. Early that morning they started walking down the path when suddenly they realised there were a whole bunch of witches following them. They were terrified!
They started running but suddenly they stopped because the path disappeared. The witches had put a spell on the path so that they could catch them and put them in the oven to cook the two little children.
Hansel knew how to get out of the witches way. Hansel told Gretel the plan. They worked together. Hansel had brought a sharp, long spear. What he did is he ran in circles and the witches got dizzy. Then Hansel took Gretel’s hand and they quickly dashed out. The witches didn’t see them go.
As they were running Hansel saw that his sister was getting left behind. He ran as fast as a cheetah to get Gretel because if they were really slow the witches would spy them out. They scurried to a tree, then they saw a little, tiny, weeny leprechaun.
The leprechaun said, ’’I can help you.’’
‘’You can?” they asked.
’’Follow me’’ said the leprachaun.
The leprachaun stretched to a tree branch, and he swung up on the branch. He helped Hansel and Gretel get on the tree and told them to hide somewhere in the branches. The witches went past them.
They hopped down from the tree and walked home.
20 years later...it was an early and sunny morning. Hansel and Gretel were still in bed. They woke up and they had a stretch and went hunting for some witches.
They went and the found a witches lair that was made out of candy.
Hansel said to Gretel,”Do not eat the candy.”
Hansel and Gretel barged through the door and they both worked together to kill the evil witch.,They put the witch into the oven and cooked her up.
Forever after they became witch hunters and never stopped hunting.
1 comment:
Jade, I really enjoyed reading your fractured fairytale. You enjoyed our Fairytales unit and this shows in the excellent quality of your writing. You have worked well towards achieving the learning intention which was to rewrite a known fairy tale using the elements of narrative writing. You used the success criteria to help you create an entertaining fairytale. I particularly like the ending of your fairytale...20 years later and some of the words you used like scurried and terrified. Ka pai! Your next step is to work on including more language features such as similes in your writing and check your punctuation as I helped you with that when you published.
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